Q20. The family has a great influence on children's development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the impact of families on children's behaviour has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that parents greatly affect the development of children's personalities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that parents play a vital role in the development of children's behaviour. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that young people have a predisposition to follow their parents' behaviour considering that all children rely on their parents at the beginning of the socialisation process before receiving primary education. As a brief illustration, children with parents suffering from obesity because of undesirable eating habits, such as over-consumption of junk food, are more likely to become overweight as they often consume the same unhealthy food eaten by their father and mother. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that the parents' role in the development of children's behaviour is crucial.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that only family members exert an influence on children's characteristics. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that in the fiercely competitive society, a myriad of working parents leading a hectic life due to devotion to work have difficulty spend enough time with their offspring. Thus, they communicate more frequently with their friends and teachers than their parents. As a result, youngsters often learn a multitude of behaviour patterns as well as habits from their peers and teachers. In addition, the advancement of technology makes it possible for the youth to make use of time online, meaning that adolescents who are generally incapable of distinguishing right from wrong can be exposed to huge amounts of harmful and obscene information, which can have a detrimental effect on young people's behaviour.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntal effect on young peoples behaviour. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37950138504 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02332458652 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592797783934 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0689176337 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.466666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154747560762 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534570462929 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565953280544 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0822331360658 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496251013123 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.