Q20. The family has a great influence on children's development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the impact of families on children's behaviour has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that parents play a vital role in the development of children's personalities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that parents exert a positive influence on young people's behaviour. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that children have a predisposition to follow parents' behaviour considering that all children rely on their parents at the beginning of the socialisation process before receiving primary education. As an illustration, children with parents suffering from obesity because of undesirable eating habits, such as over-consumption of junk food, are more likely to become overweight as they often consume the same unhealthy food which is eaten by their parents. In light of the above, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that the parents' role in children's behaviour is crucial.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that parents only affect children's characteristics. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that in the fiercely competitive society, a multitude of working parents leading a hectic life have difficulty spending enough time with their offspring due to devotion to work. As a result, youngsters communicate more frequently with their friends and teachers than their friends. Thus, they learn a number of behaviour patterns as well as habits from their peers and teacher. In addition, the development of technology makes it possible for adolescents to make use of time online. This means that minors who generally are less able to distinguish right from wrong can easily be exposed to harmful and obscene information on the Internet, exerting a detrimental influence on their behaviour. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...be a solid basis for the claim that the parents role in childrens behaviour is crucial....
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3543956044 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99429251183 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590659340659 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.156352562 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.647058824 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4117647059 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145295896418 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431888421071 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041297110348 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806762709107 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489214157576 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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