Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes is banned. Do you agree or disagree?
It is claimed that overeating causes similar damage to human health just like smoking, so it is necessary to implement prohibition of advertisements for both some food products and smoking. In my opinion, the former view is well-founded, yet the latter seems to be rather unreasonable.
It is totally understandable that consuming an unnecessarily large amount of food is a detriment to people’s health conditions just like smoking is. In fact, excessive food intake increases body fat, potentially resulting in obesity. In recent years, the number of obese people has been constantly growing at an unprecedented rate in consequence of overeating. Furthermore, consuming unhealthy food such as fast food or processed food on regular basis also brings about numerous health-related problems such as blood pressure or high cholesterol. Issues regarding people’s state of health caused by eating too much are for sure comparable with those caused by smoking, lung cancer for example.
However, I do not think it is an effective solution to forbid advertisements for several particular foodstuffs. It is unfair to manufacturers because advertising is their main measure to approach prospective customers and to introduce their new products in the market. Without publicity materials, many food manufacturers would experience crises as their profit declines as a result of this prohibition policy. Furthermore, it is a disadvantage to consumers because they will not be informed about products they want to buy. It is true that advertising encourages people to purchase things but it only plays a small part in the amount of food intake which is mainly determined by consumers themselves.
In conclusion, I agree that the way overeating harms human health is similar to smoking, whereas it seems to me that advertising of food products should not be banned.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, regarding, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43298969072 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25826477873 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604810996564 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6625203664 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.615384615 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3076923077 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247363342271 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854429433685 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104990940967 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195368949203 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132638890117 0.056905535591 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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