As a result of advances in medical care, average life expectancy is increasing for men and women. Do you think most people will see this as a positive development? What are the disadvantages of an ageing population for individuals and society? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience or observations.
The advancement in medical care have signicaficant impact on individuals life span in regards of a longer life as well as enhancing life expectancy.I believe that the benifits of this development has out balance the disadvantages.This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvanges briefly with relevant reasoning and examples.
One of the phenominal advantage is that the people can have longer and harmoneous relation with there loved ones with the passage of time.For instance,from previous life exptancy rate it was clear that kids were not able to have plenty of time with there grand parents as they died early but now it is different.They spend an affectionate time with their warm hearted grand parents and can grow old with them.Moreover,it also provides benefits in various developing fields like arts,science literature,etc.For example, in past many famous scientist like there was chinese scientist Ching Shan who died at the age of 32 due to some illness and with regret of not completing his ongoing invention.As well,some english poets naming Jack and Amma who had given us a very calm piece of poetry also didn't had a longer life span.
On the other,although this improvement many advantages we can't neglect disadvantages like an obvious detriment is that there is trememdous amount of increase in rate of population.For illustration,In 2011 the death and birth rate were equal all around the world till and this trend was similar till 2013 so there was no increase in population.However,now due to longer life spans the death rate has decreased among many countries and birth rate is somehow got doubled due to which population is rising day by day.Furthermore, longer life doesn't means a healthy life as there are more diseases are find among elders.Lets take Jorge,my best friend grand father.He is 88 and he is suffering from sicknesses like sugar and Hepatitis.As Arthritis is most most common in older genration so he is also having that due to this there are large amount of expensive mediacals bills.
In conclusion,inspite of the disadvantages I think that sadness can be outsighted by the enormous happiness that desirable advantages can give us.If overpopulation can be control with regards of birthrate as it is more fruitful to live a suficient time with your beloveds.Moreover to it, death of one's loved ones is more hurtful to see at such an early than the pain of disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13032581454 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29680362472 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5664160401 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 99.0 20.2975951904 488% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 247.47777678 49.4020404114 501% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 511.75 106.682146367 480% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 99.75 20.7667163134 480% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 31.75 7.06120827912 450% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.01903807615 697% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154408839705 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956383169522 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428045250977 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956383169522 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428045250977 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 52.6 13.0946893788 402% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -29.01 50.2224549098 -58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.44779559118 259% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 41.9 11.3001002004 371% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.66 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.58 8.58950901804 146% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 41.6 10.1190380762 411% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 42.0 10.7795591182 390% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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