Schools should emphasize academic subjects, which are more important for future jobs, rather than sports and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There has always been a controversy as regards whether educational institutions should place emphasis on academic subjects like science and technology instead of sports and music. While some people are in favor of the former by reason of its significance in students’ potential careers, I am strongly of the opinion that sports and music should not be disregarded for the following reasons.
First of all, it is undeniable that sports invigorate humans while music comforts our soul and spirit. In today’s fast-paced world, people often confront excessive stress, constant anxiety, and unrelenting pressure. By virtue of sports and music, we are able to find a different world, far more beautiful than the reality, to slowly sense the breath of life. Additionally, notwithstanding the achievements and miracles made possible by science and technology, numerous issues cannot be resolved by them. Social issues such as juvenile delinquency, racial discrimination and moral degradation are all beyond the scope of science. Only sports and music can address the aforementioned problems.
In addition, sports and music enable students to develop their creativity which is deemed necessary to complement science and technology. For instance, world-renowned artists like Leonardo da Vinci and Luca Pacioli are also widely known as talented mathematicians and scientists. Another example is Albert Einstein. He is not only a great physicist and mathematician, but also a capable pianist and violinist. It is perfectly understandable that we are more likely to elaborate our thought and do some brainstorming in the process of creating works of art. As far as physical exercise is concerned, studies conducted by prestigious associations of American Universities showed that a regular workout increases blood flow to the brain, leading to increased concentration, enhanced memory and stimulated creativity. In developed nations, sports and music are compulsory learning subjects for primary and secondary school students.
In conclusion, I hold firm to the belief that sports and music are imperative and should not be neglected for the aforementioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, as regards, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66257668712 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24384436316 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625766871166 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4319939337 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.375 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205507911177 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060567536766 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544427695214 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127020625985 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186345460809 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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