Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is a little doubt that schooling academic sciences at school will be advantageous for students’ future specialization rather than teaching subjects such as sports and music. However, I completely disagree with this statement because it is difficult to learn and may confuse them.

Certainly, academic subjects really help to build our future careers, however, I would argue that it is difficult learning while studying major subjects at school. To be more precise, there are several types of sciences which are hard to learn there. A good example of this is, when I had been studying at school, subjects such as “Math”, “Physic” and “Chemistry” were really difficult which made me confuse with its numbers, formulas and rules. If at that time there were academic subjects, I would give up studying. Here I am referring to the fact that without subjects such as music and sports schools are not able to be school. The prime reason for it is that these subjects are important which help to become creative and strong. Thus, special subjects should not be thought of at schools.

The other point is subjects which will be beneficial for pupils may confuse them. This is because the teacher gives a great number of home tasks in each subject. If we add academic subjects, it would be twice as much as before. As a result of this, students confuse between major and academic subjects and lose interests in studying.

In conclusion, there are several other interesting ways which will be beneficial for students' careers. However, academic subjects lead to problems which we discussed above. Therefore, schools should continue teaching their main subjects.

Votes
Average: 6 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12589928058 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62054495012 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528776978417 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6273971973 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0625 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396726486151 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138717426816 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07050524641 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275304685832 0.151304729494 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300551187957 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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