Several people have asked me about this question from Cambridge IELTS 8. I wrote the
essay below with the help of some of my students. A few simple linking features are
highlighted.
It is true that new technologies have had an influence on communication between
people. Technology has affected relationships in various ways, and in my opinion there
are both positive and negative effects.
Technology has had an impact on relationships in business, education and social
life. Firstly, telephones and the Internet allow business people in different countries to
interact without ever meeting each other. Secondly, services like Skype create new
possibilities for relationships between students and teachers. For example, a student
can now take video lessons with a teacher in a different city or country. Finally, many
people use social networks, like Facebook, to make new friends and find people who
share common interests, and they interact through their computers rather than face to
face.
On the one hand, these developments can be extremely positive. Cooperation between
people in different countries was much more difficult when communication was limited
to written letters or telegrams. Nowadays, interactions by email, phone or video are
almost as good as face-to-face meetings, and many of us benefit from these
interactions, either in work or social contexts. On the other hand, the availability of new
communication technologies can also have the result of isolating people and
discouraging real interaction. For example, many young people choose to make friends
online rather than mixing with their peers in the real world, and these ‘virtual’
relationships are a poor substitute for real friendships.
In conclusion, technology has certainly revolutionised communication between people,
but not all of the outcomes of this revolution have been positive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 22, column 9, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... communication between people, but not all of the outcomes of this revolution have been p...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78039215686 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20192176051 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61568627451 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0587686762 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.384615385 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.38176352705 479% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0927361185734 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329123951569 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0184900814579 0.0667982634062 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0263870171668 0.151304729494 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027238332287 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.24 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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