Society is becoming obsessed with material goods like fast cars, designer clothes and flashy jewellery. We have stopped caring about the important things and that is why divorce rates are so high and family bonds are not as strong anymore; our value system is disintegrating.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Materialism is becoming a growing issue in the modern world. Some people claim that this leads to high divorce rates, the deterioration of family bonds and our value system. I partly agree with this idea for the following reasons.
Firstly, the obsession of material goods can be a decisive factor when it comes to high divorce rates, the disintegration of the value system and the weakening of family bonds. To earn high salaries, these days people spend most of their time working. For instance, a typical Vietnam white-collar worker goes to work at 7am and returns home at 5pm. At home some may even be inundated with streams of deadlines. As a result, they have little time for family, which leads to the weakening bonds between family members. Husbands and wives do not have time to listen to and care for each other, which could lead to divorces. Moreover, the chase for material goods can make people indulge in illegal acts such as smuggling and drug trafficking, which indicates that the value system is degrading. Taken together, the implications of materialism are serious.
However, materialism is not the sole culprit in the separation of couples and the deterioration of the value system. The main reason for divorces is the incompatibility between husbands and wives. In other words, they struggle with reaching a mutual resolution. If they do not find ways to settle their disputes, break-up is inevitable. As for the disintegration of moral values, schools are partly condemned for not educating children adequately. The painful truth is that many institutes strive for achievements, so they just focus on teaching children to pass exams. As a result, moral lessons are neglected and teachers do not intervene when students cheat in optional tests.
In conclusion, materialism is partly blamed for high divorce rates, the degradation of family bonds and our value system, while the disputes in family and the negligence of schools also play a part. Thus, it is crucial for parents to care more for their family, and schools should do their bid to impart moral knowledge to students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as for, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04310344828 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76407954862 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528735632184 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9315351571 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.75 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199842492321 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614565640703 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638154873644 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13847740911 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503739458391 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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