Some children take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
In this contemporary society, the vast majority of high school students decide to take a gap year to other nations before attending tertiary schools. In addition, it is a great opportunity to broaden kids’ horizon about different aspects around the world. Although many people consider this trend as a drawback, I still believe the advatanges outweigh the negative impacts.
On the other hand, there are many inevitable setbacks related to the decision to take a year off. To begin with, students may suffer from a sense of loneliness. In addition, taking a gap year means attending colleges later than peers. Hence, children may find it really difficult to strike up new relationships with friends who are younger than them. Moreover, it is widely believed that certain knowledge would be wiped out of children’s brain after leaving school for a long period of time. For instance, compared to students who spend several hours dealing with math problems, older people struggle to find solutions more as they totally forget about the methods. Consequently, spending time revising the rudimental knowledge is an inevitable process, wasting time of young people.
Despite the drawbacks described above, I’m of the opinion that having a year off to travel or work bring about impressive merits. Firstly, children have more chances to learn how to live independently from their parents. Additionally, if kids adapt to new environment to find part-time jobs, they may be obligated to find personal expenditure to spend on a daily basis .As a result, while many children find it complicated to separate from their family’s sponsorship when they grow up, these people tend to successfully deal with this problem. Moreover, leaving education help teenagers eradicate all the depressed moments and anxiety at schools. In addition, many children in this contemporary face with higher risks of mental problems including depression or anxiety as they are overexposed to study.However, taking a year off to travel can reset one’s mind and help them become more conscious in making decisions in the future.
Taking everything into consideration, although problems related to one year gap before entering universities can be disadvantageous in some aspects, I believe that the advantages outweight the drawbacks due to many reasons related to future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35675675676 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89816949357 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.894508538 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.875 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1875 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18322022423 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559283636337 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562624797241 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113514269291 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384255042195 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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