It is a fact that in some countries, the average weight of the citizens is shooting up while their fitness and health conditions are worsening. In my view, this is mainly because of the food habits and modern lifestyle they follow. In this essay, I will examine these two factors and then propose a viable solution.
One of the foremost reasons for obesity is the consumption of unhealthy foods. Many people started to follow western food habits and eventually ended up eating high-fat content foods like pizza and burgers. Regular consumption of these fat-rich foods will increase a person’s weight in a short span of time.
In addition to that, nowadays, more and more people are living a sedentary lifestyle. They do not dedicate any time to do any kind of physical activity. As a result, they lose their resistance power. If this lifestyle continues then people will fall ill more frequently and lose their health permanently.
It is necessary that the government takes steps to open many sports complexes and fitness studios near residential communities. Most of the people who do not want to travel far to go to a sports center will be ready to use one if it is available nearby. In a study conducted by a popular newspaper, 90% of the respondents said that they are willing to use the gym or any physical activity centers if they are within a 3 kilometer radius.
To conclude, encouraging people to do more physical activities will not only improve their fitness and overall health but also help people to shed weight.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1236 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.731 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and lose their health permanently It is necessary that the government take...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, while, in addition, kind of, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7566539924 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55318593199 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551330798479 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 263.0 20.2975951904 1296% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1251.0 106.682146367 1173% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 263.0 20.7667163134 1266% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 77.0 7.06120827912 1090% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169595843762 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169595843762 0.084324248473 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101479804895 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501716813297 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 132.5 13.0946893788 1012% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -187.01 50.2224549098 -372% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 104.7 11.3001002004 927% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.81 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.58 8.58950901804 240% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 9.78957915832 552% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 107.2 10.1190380762 1059% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 54.0 10.7795591182 501% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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