In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Essay topics:

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

One of the most debatable issue today relates to majority of the people's weight tend to be increasing, and physical fitness are decreasing. Presenting my views I would intend to explore the afformentioned views in the upcoming paragraphs.
There are probably a number of factors involved Why people's body make fatty. The chief cause might be that in today's era majority of the people's like to eat the fast food,as well as fast food is cooked by several fatty oils and spices. For instance, doctor's suggest that more use of fast food is adversely affect on the human heart . As well as subsequent factor could be that, in the past people did the hardwork but now a time people do the computer work it is fully brain work not physically activity, schedule of people tend to be very busy. So they have no time for exercise. As a consequence people's weight tend to be increasing.
However, a definite actions that could be taken to mitigate of most of the people prefer to travel by the own car and motorcycle ,but I suggest people's who work near to their home they ride on bicycle to go for work. As well as a second bonus might be that people drink more than more water in a day it reduce the fat level in the human body. Home made food eaten by the people's.
To conclusions, although there are good reasons but my point of views is "health is initially and after that all work". Otherwise human life tend to be decreas.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1184.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51376094385 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4220686994 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0769230769 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9230769231 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178596349605 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590449967956 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544746598578 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100858913342 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349007782206 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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