These days, almost all people strive to earn money in order to need their basic needs. To implement it, they should work. However, since certain age they retire. In some countries retirement age is 50; whereas others require people to work until they are 65 or 70 years old. In my opinion, people should be paid for work as long as they are able to perform their duties properly and retirement should also depend on the kind of work. In this essay, I will make an effort to support my view via some specific examples and reasons.
Firstly, retirement age should depend on the type of work. For example, there might be work which requires physical ability. People starting the age of 60 cannot be as fit as younger workers. Their muscles might not function properly. However, other fields of work may be relevant to older people, such as book-keeper. Thus, the retirement age should differ for kind of work.
Moreover, not all people possess same health conditions. There are some people over 65 that can work even better than the young albeit their age. If a person is fit and healthy it would not be appropriate to retire them and deprive them of their job. So, people should be allowed to work as long as they are fit and healthy which does not depend on age but depends on people.
On the other hand, opponents of this opinion claim that old people had worked for years and may be tired and bored of their work. However, there may be old workers who fulfill their job with great enthusiasm and want to continue to do their job.
To sum it all up, age is not in paramount importance for retirement of people. Instead of retire all people at the same age, the right of choosing own retirement age should be given to people.
- In some countries the average worker is obliged to retire at the age of 50, while in others is obliged to retire until they are 65 or 70. Until what age do you think people should be encouraged to remain in paid employment? 56
- At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of the young aldults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage. 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...should also depend on the kind of work. In this essay, I will make an effort to su...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...d worked for years and may be tired and bored of their work. However, there may be old w...
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Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to own'
Suggestion: to own
... at the same age, the right of choosing own retirement age should be given to peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, whereas, for example, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54952076677 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22837438512 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517571884984 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7574037433 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.2 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.65 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320123117373 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112853310004 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962968687496 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197757739837 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759444884791 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 13.0946893788 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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