In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think
that the government should be responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do
you agree or disagree?
It is true that children in some parts of the world are becoming obese and unhealthy. I agree with the role
of the government in resolving this vexing issue. However, I also believe that the role of parenting and
school settings should also be emphasized.
Childhood obesity and children’s health problems should be partly blamed to the authority. We cannot
deny the fact that overweight children are of high chance to be vulnerable to numerous serious
diseases such as diabetes and hypertension, which poses a dire threat to the national growth of any
country as they are the future’s human resources. As a result, the authority should be accountable for
mitigating this problem. Take China as a good example, the governing body has been taking
action to lower obesity rate among children by organizing boot camps where children
arephysically trained to lose weight and take up daily healthy habit. This is because China’s
political activists are scared of the scenario that these overweight children will not be able to meet the
physical demand to join the army.
Besides the governmental role, parents and schools are also liable for their children’s good health.
Regarding the former, working parents nowadays tend to devote virtually their whole time to
working in order to ensure material well-being, which means that they may spend less time carefully
taking care of their children’s diet. Therefore, without supervision, children might eat unhealthy food
or lead a sedentary lifestyle. This explains why close parental care and control is crucial in ensuring
children’s balanced diet and healthy life. In terms of the role of education in teaching children
about health living, some schools inclined to place emphasis on theoretical subjects as math and
literature, and neglect the importance of physical education, which reduces their students’ workout
frequency. School efforts to promote healthy diet and engage students in physical exercises are
irreplaceable in tackling the problem of child obesity.
In conclusion, the government, parents and schools should all shoulder the responsibility
for protecting their children from obesity and unhealthy lifestyles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64117647059 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01025352713 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602941176471 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4683135504 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.866666667 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.38176352705 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889328279685 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603407548005 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615964660813 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516326771713 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.