In some countries more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college University or even after finding a job Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

In many cultures, children and their parents make conscious decisions to live together well into the children’s adulthood when they have all the means necessary to establish an independent life. Although this practice could have some benefits to both the parents and their offspring, I strongly argue that it could do more harm than good to a person in the modern society.
When adult children and their parents live together, a couple of economic upsides could be identified. By residing in one property instead of splitting into two, the incurred spending on electricity, water and cleaning services is
potentially just half as much. This effect is even more profound if a family stays on rental properties. It is more economical to rent one place in lieu of two. Another advantage of living together is familial support during hard times. In the event that one of the members in a family falls ill, especially the aging parents, it is much easier for their sons and daughters to tend to them as they do not have to travel to another place; thus, this helps save the cost on taking care of the sick.
I, however, assert that the often-overlooked pitfall of living with one’s parents for too long can inflict irreparable damage to a person’s life and negate any benefits that it brings. In countries where parents and adult children live together, families usually have strict hierarchical rules that the children must follow whatever their parents order them to do. Consequently, this practice brings up generations of adults who do not know how to make decisions until they get married and when they do, they mirror their parents. Today’s economy rewards ingenuity and decisiveness, so a person’s chance to succeed in life is negatively affected if that person does not have the opportunities to make uninfluenced decisions early on.
In conclusion, a family model which consists of parents and their adult children has some positive effects worth noting, yet the long-term outcome is undesirable. I am a firm advocate that this family model should cease to continue

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, look, so, thus, well, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04347826087 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75094606705 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582608695652 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8423524175 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.285714286 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230324316906 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820945716809 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507066989623 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123500445238 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292471195757 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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