In some countries at secondary or high school, there may be two streams of study: academic or vocational.
What are the advantages for students and society of putting students into two streams at the age of fifteen?
In some countries, een-year-old school students are o ered the choice of academic or vocational training. In this essay, I shall outline the reasons for adopting this two-stream system, and suggest its advantages.
As economies become more complex and mo specialised, worke need a high degree of competence. Countries whe there is an emphasis on vocational training hope to imp ve their economic competitiveness with a young skilled wor orce. Those that have chosen to train prospective employees while still at school may have an even sharper competitive edge. In my view, an educa-
tion system with a purely academic curriculum suits about 40% of students. Admittedly, people who go on to university generally
and employment on g duration not in their eld, and successful post-graduates a almost invariably o e d highly paid jobs. However obtaining a degree takes time and dedication. For people who do not wish to do this, or who do not have the ability, they are far less likely to and work on leaving school where academic study has been the only option, particularly their marks and se -esteem a low. A fortunate few do gain employment, but more commonly, even in the developed world, the majority of young school leavers are faced with unemployment - a scourge to society and a cause of distress to individuals. Therefor , countries like
Germany have decided that all school students should be placed in either an academic or a vocational st amfrom een. From an individual's pe ective, being a plumbe for example, does not only mean that d inage functions well, but that the plumber belongs to an organisation of t despeople and is part of a respected t dition. Starting this t ining at the age of fteen ensures that an adolescent has a head start with regard to jobs as well as a clear focus and sense of personal worth.
I firmly believe there needs to be an alternative curriculum to the academic at secondary ; otherwise, on leaving school, too many young people are adrift , and specialised industries lack a skilled workforce.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91040462428 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94310817237 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627167630058 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0436487884 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.357142857 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214011062672 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630671875547 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475305842083 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099681431096 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555957732607 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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