In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
At present, some individuals claim that high school graduates can be benefited from working or travelling for one year before attending college. Others, however, argue that it will bring about negative effects for them.
It is true that there are certainly some merits for those who have a break time scheme before going to university. To start with, they used to concentrate on their academic performances, so most of these young people lack real life experience. Now they are able to work for one year, where they can deepen their understanding of contemporary society. It is generally believed that such experience will be an essential factor for future career success. Another advantage is that if one took a year off for travelling, he would be more independent. As he would have varied duties to deal with, like booking ticket and cooking. So these life skills will improve their quality of live.
In spite of these statements given above, there are some voices against this break time plan due to its adverse effect. For instance, if one found a job prior to attending university, he would feel difficult to adjust himself to academic context, even he would never return to campus. Because one may think that it is better to have an employment instead of studying in university. However, I consider that it is less likely to happen, as an academic qualification plays an important part in seeking a decent job today.
To sum up, I would like to embrace the idea that our society should encourage high school graduates to enjoy working or travelling before starting university. Because this is the best way for them to get a clear career goal.
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... bring about negative effects for them. It is true that there are certainly some...
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..., even he would never return to campus. Because one may think that it is better to have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, for instance, in spite of, it is true, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90391459075 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64076123273 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612099644128 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0399750312 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233772530148 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070377964347 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567461815536 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146121252625 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604560948572 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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