In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage

Hard work is a must to achieve the destination. Some people are of the opinion that encouraging children to work hard to acquire the dream is ubiquitous in some culture. This has both positive and negative outcomes, which are dealt with below.
On the first side, children usually imagine a lot about dreams at the beginning of their life. It is a time when parents, teachers involvement is necessary for the life of children. Because losing trust means losing dreams. To cite an example, if pupils lose the test the first time, they feel demotivated. Therefore, it the onus of elders to motivate them regarding their set goals. Learners should have optimistic thinking about their goal. Because winning and losing are these types of things that commonly happened in everyone's life. But they should not lose the expectation anyway.
On the other hand, convincing children to pursue work hard has also some disadvantages. Firstly, children are like clay they can be moulded into any shape. Sometimes they think unexpected. To cite an example, it is the dream of many to become a millionaire at a younger age, but it is not feasible due to which children can undergo depression. Moreover, many offspring practise day and night to obtain the highest rank in class, which is detrimental to their health and can lead them to depression, anxiety and isolation.
I would like to reiterate that it has a plethora of advantages to encourage children to work hard. However, this message can be caused some mental disorder.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
Hard work is a must to achieve the destination Some people are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1235.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8431372549 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55557528033 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 255.0 20.2975951904 1256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1235.0 106.682146367 1158% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 255.0 20.7667163134 1228% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 101.0 7.06120827912 1430% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284686425936 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.284686425936 0.084324248473 338% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180162387454 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564316343212 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 128.9 13.0946893788 984% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -187.35 50.2224549098 -373% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 102.7 11.3001002004 909% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.27 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.12 8.58950901804 234% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 9.78957915832 582% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 104.0 10.1190380762 1028% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 57.0 10.7795591182 529% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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