It is true that many children are encouraged and educated by the idea that all goals can be achieved through hard work. I believe that this cognition to some extent plays a vital role in helping children succeed, yet it has also downsides.
There is no denying that encouraging children to work hard so as to achieve their final goals can improve their motivation and braveration to pursue what they want. When holding the faith that all can be achieved through consistent effort, children would have more courage and confidence and would be more likely to scale the peak that they have always been looking forward. Forthermore, even though there are obstables and difficulties on their travel to the peak, children who believe that had word can fight against all would never be disencouraged. Instead, hey would work harder untile they can suceed. It seems that as long as it is the belief of individual efforts that encourages children make great achievements.
Yet there are downsides if children only focus on hard work. To start with, over emphasis on individual efforts may consume people's too much time and energy which, overwise, can be invested in more essencial things. For example, people who have talents in academic researching may waste time in struggling with market business and their strength and talents cannot be fully used. In addition, people influenced by the idea that hard work can overcome all difficulties may be trapped in a wrong method to pursue their goals and they may work harder to go forward instead of using new methods. What's more, people may blame themselves when they fail for several times, thus becoming less and less confident.
In conclusion, I believe that there are both benefits and drawbacks for people to believe that all can be achieved by hard work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, so, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97359735974 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53191030051 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9874715771 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.923076923 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234160919833 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994721947173 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543020083988 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151419134806 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809912670437 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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