Some education systems make students focus on certain subjects at the age of 15 while others require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school What are the benefits of each system Which is better

There are controversial ideas heating a debate over the teaching method. While some claim that until the absorbing insight reaches the age of 15, the education authority should only focus students to learn a certain knowledge, the opposite makes a statement that students should be required to digest a wealth of compulsory subjects till they graduate. While the latter are valid to some extent, I would contend that the former would potentially bring about more tremendous benefits.

Apparently, a broad and holistic curriculum can create versatile individuals, make sure that students have a comprehensive personal development. Whilst using this extensive curriculum, the absorbing insights will not only know about background knowledge, but also digest into some technical understanding. As a result, those absorbing insights will certainly have a more competitive edge, which leads to easier thriving their carree. In addition, apart from the undoubtable benefits of academic subjects, non-academic ones are also of importance. In particular, sport or PE classes can enhance student’s ability to work as a team, or art classes can strengthen their creativity and help you to release stress.

While the redeeming features are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if those on digest into certain subjects are ignored. Moreover, it is also argued that the educational institution makes students focus on job-related or foundation subjects that are suitable for their higher study, which leads to the confidence and well-preparedness for the real life situation. However, focusing on a limited number of subjects cannot guarantee a student’s well-rounded development. They may be proficient in their work, but they could lack necessary communication skills or suffer from a physically weak body.

In conclusion, both study methods bring a positive influence on a student's life. However, by learning an extensive curriculum, the absorbing insights will be much more advantageous than the others.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...methods bring a positive influence on a students life. However, by learning an extensive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, apart from, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65231788079 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12356980123 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612582781457 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9475167031 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.928571429 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274253441197 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811867923131 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833429353204 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157452311544 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089593223819 0.056905535591 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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