Nowadays, many opinions suggest that students only focus on science subjects, but forget the crucial role of art-based ones. While many studies show that non-exam, art-based subjects help them, especially in secondary school , to improve their academic performance. Personally, I am totally agree with this opinion because of the undeniable benefits it brings to students.
Obviously, the arts often demand confidence and self-expression in front of people or crowds, the most obvious benefit of these subjects is self-assurance training for children. This is also a beneficial feature in a variety of other learning areas. Confident kids possibly talk to their teachers more about the difficulties they're having and seek the best guidance possible to improve their academic performance. Additionally, the arts, such as theater and music, provide pupils with chances to develop social skills: teamwork, public speaking, and presentation. It can be said affỉmation that those skills offer a great advantage in all subjects since the majority of assigned tasks require such skills to successfully carry out. Moreover teachers typically have better impression of students possessing high-level of social skills .
Another reason these subjects should be on the timetable is because they assist students in discovering their interests in other academic fields. Using literature as an example, if a student enrolls in and enjoys a class of classical theatre, he will need to learn extensively about the authors of those plays, as well as read several books to gain context and additional background knowledge. They may deepen their comprehension as well as their love of reading by participating in these activities. Nevertheless, arts subjects may also be used to stimulate students' interest in some boring subjects like history. It is more easier for children to remind historical events and dates if they are taught through related plays or music concerts rather than simply reading the textbook.
In conclusion, non-tested art subjects are an essential part of secondary school's curriculum as it makes a huge impact on developing the necessary skills for the youngsters and better their academic results.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...elp them, especially in secondary school , to improve their academic performance. ...
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Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...c performance. Personally, I am totally agree with this opinion because of the undeni...
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Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ir teachers more about the difficulties theyre having and seek the best guidance possi...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... such skills to successfully carry out. Moreover teachers typically have better impressi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 833, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s possessing high-level of social skills . Another reason these subjects should b...
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Line 3, column 621, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ome boring subjects like history. It is more easier for children to remind historical event...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ects are an essential part of secondary schools curriculum as it makes a huge impact on...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpact on developing the necessary skills for the youngsters and better their acad...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53550295858 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94800824204 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64201183432 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6661068666 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.733333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248579748344 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744553322674 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693854032808 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14806028769 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211436911927 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...elp them, especially in secondary school , to improve their academic performance. ...
^^
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...c performance. Personally, I am totally agree with this opinion because of the undeni...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...ir teachers more about the difficulties theyre having and seek the best guidance possi...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... such skills to successfully carry out. Moreover teachers typically have better impressi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 833, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s possessing high-level of social skills . Another reason these subjects should b...
^^
Line 3, column 621, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ome boring subjects like history. It is more easier for children to remind historical event...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ects are an essential part of secondary schools curriculum as it makes a huge impact on...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpact on developing the necessary skills for the youngsters and better their acad...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53550295858 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94800824204 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64201183432 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6661068666 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.733333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248579748344 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744553322674 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693854032808 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14806028769 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211436911927 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.