It is believed that enterprises, the economy as well as community can benefit from the population which are growing older. Although it is true that this trend can be advantageous to in terms of such aspects to some extent, I personally believe that the drawbacks are far greater.
The rise in the elderly workforce can be seen as positive due to some reasons relating to business, the economy and society. On a financial level, older staffs tend to have practical skills and valuable experience to pass on to the adolescents, thereby not only improving work productivity but also boosting economic growth. From a social perspective, it is clear that the elderly people are more willing to participate in community service projects and voluntary activities than the younger generations are. For instance, while I hardly have time to join hands with social responsibilities, such as local environmental campaigns, my grandfather manages to engage in such duties whenever he can.
However, the arguments about these aspects given above can be considered to be more detrimental from the opposite angle. Firstly, this fast-changing world requires a necessity for keeping up with the latest technology, but the older do not seem to be creative and innovative enough to adapt. As a consequence, this has a negative effect on the sustainable development of a particular organization or a national economy as a whole. Furthermore, from the social point of view, if younger green staffs have to compete with experienced ones, they might have little chance to get the vacancies, or must accept low-paying jobs. This directly leads to higher unemployment rates, resulting in a myriad of social evils, petty thefts and robberies, for example.
In conclusion, while the aging population is obviously of financial and social value for local firms, economy and society, I would argue it brings more disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld argue it brings more disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25901639344 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06388135978 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.060821838 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 133.666666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162634674413 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056089542843 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329452180542 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100320057794 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241653693789 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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