some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on every day matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only thinks about their own wishes . Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discussed both these Views and give your own opinion.
In today’s world, children's up bringing has changed fundamentally in comparison with the past and parents are becoming more and more permissive. Although some people argue that it is not acceptable to give our children in early ages free rein in all aspects for enormous reasons, others opine that there are some fields which is more beneficial to let kids to make their own final decision. To my mind, parents should be well-informed about childs psychological demands because it empowers parents to treat children in the best possible way based on situations. I will outline main point of views about this controversial issue.
many psychological studies have shown that letting youngsters to choose all their necessities will have harmful and irreversible effect in the long run. Firstly, they will become extremely selfish and self-assured, emphasising on their own taste and hence, they do not show any intention to listen to other points of view. Secondly, they do not have enough opportunities to instill social etiquettes such as consulting with others who have more experience. Last but not least, they would not able to get along with their counterpartsor having a positive interaction, since they are more sensitive than others and they easily get offended. therefore, our society will not be as efficient and friendly as it ought to be.
While, many family psychologists warn parents regularly that strict upbringing has some drawback too. By the way of an example, unfortunately, some parents force their offsprings opt for university subjects because of high social status that are not truley their passion. therefore m, they would not get good scores or pass their exams easily and finally they will not be a prosperous members of community. so, study fields together with other life’s dimensions which can have straightforward impacts on parents beloved should be selective depends on children’s motivation and enthusiasm. On the other hand, as parents should set a good example, kids can develope sense of respect and value to others.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, because of technological advances and revolutionized way of living, children have access to boundless choices in many aspects, which were barely conceivable fifty years ago. so, it means that are more likely burden heavier responsibilities so as to manage their demands of them in controlled ways, while upgrade children’s self-steem simultaneously by respecting and getting involved them in related matters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, such as, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35910224439 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00835998297 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59102244389 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.1211029718 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.3125 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17264115349 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536254250754 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411254964674 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103838735938 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257400165321 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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