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Unmistakably in this millenial world where every individual is exposed to umpteen choices, decision making entails it own set of challenges. There are a few people who assert that youngsters should be set free to make their own choices so that they can develop as an individual whilst there are others who contend that doing so will result in a society that would only inhabit individuals with their own vested interests. In this essay , I will be discussing both these views and state my opinion in the concluding paragraph .
To commence, there are certain formative habits such as taste preferences, dress-sense, religious views, cultural sentiments that are instilled in an individual as a part of their upbringing. When the child is too young, it does not have much control over these choices and they get incorporated in a child’s personality and the remaining choices that he makes subsequently are a fallout of the learnings imbibed during this period. Nurture plays a major role is shaping a child’s personality and hence the parenting plays a major role during this period to determine the personality traits of the child. For instance, if a child’s parent have a conservative outlook, then the risk-taking in the child would also be very low and such kind of conditioning would be difficult to overcome in the late years of the life.
Nevertheless, it is undeniable that the world around is continuously evolving and that what we learnt in the past keeps getting outlandish in the present times. In such a scenario , the mindset of an individual should be progressive and must embrace changes. In other words, what skill-set worked earlier might not be relevant in today’s time to sustain the competition around. Hence, it becomes all the more necessary that children should grow out of the shackles of the hard-wired parenting and develop an individual mindset of their own. If they learn things through trying themselves, then the chances of faultering are reduced to minimum because in such a case they would discover their own ways to come out of their problem.
To sum up, it is necessary to accept changes around and grant warranted liberty to the children so that they can metamorphose into independent individuals; however, it is the responsibility of the parents and guardians to help them realize that the freedom to make choices comes at a cost and that this freedom is not exploited to become excess of self-centric and a threat to the concept of egalitarian society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, then, for instance, kind of, such as, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03597122302 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89055463924 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544364508393 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.1540284358 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.538461538 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0769230769 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214373048154 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700565973351 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835371856981 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125374705766 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0882286999737 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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