Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on
everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result
in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is
important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People’s opinions differ as to whether or not children should make their own decision in every aspect of their life because it could lead to a selfish society. However, I believe that it is necessary for the children to decide matters that having influences on them.
For a variety of reasons, parents should not give their children allowance to choose things such as foodstuff, garments, and entertainment. Firstly, the children could not be aware of their family financial situation which can make them be prodigal with the top trending items that they do not really need. For instance, youngsters are easily charmed by the new clothes wore by celebrities which seem to be improper and expensive, but they still overspend for them. Secondly, making decisions alone since the early ages can develop an anti-social habit. This is partly due to that independent children need less helps from society; therefore, they will consume less time to work and communicate with other people.
In spite of the above arguments, I support the view that the children should have their own choices. It is beneficial for the public as a whole when each individual can deal with their own problems first before asking for help, which can only be achieved by letting the children face with the issues from childhood. As a consequence, it will cost less time and efforts of society, hence boosting the level of productivity. Besides, if the young students use their money effectively to satisfy their daily demand, they will learn not only the way to complete the easiest tasks but also the value of money that may form a habit of frugality.
In conclusion, I believe that children should be granted to give choice about their everyday matters as it plays a critical role in their success in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 31, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
People's opinions differ as to whether or not children should make their own decision...
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Line 4, column 608, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun helps is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...y due to that independent children need less helps from society; therefore, they wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9701986755 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61106310564 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58940397351 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.3721404216 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.083333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.75 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265656609331 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961937810701 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702360747198 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185151033744 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581840466453 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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