Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food,clothes and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different opinions about whether children should make decisons on their own. While it may lead to a selfish personality of children, I believe they should make their own choices when facing some important things.
The movement of children making decisons by themselves may cause a society of selfishness. Children make their own decisions may develop a habit of ignoring other people's feeling, and this may make them become selfish. When they grow up, they will find it hard to get along well with their friends and collegues. For exemple, they will have trouble in communicating with other employees when working on a team project. If everyone in the society ignore the feelings and needs of each other, there will be no teamwork and the social productivity will also decline.
On the other hand, it is necessary for children to decide what to do on some vital occassions. They can build a self-reliance personality by making some decisions,including chossing the proper time to play and finish homework, deciding what should take when going out for a trip. This can help them maintain a balance of work and entertainment and live a organzied life in the future. In addition, children should choose their own hobbies such as music and sports, this can help them achieve their potential.In contrast, if their parents decide they should play violin or football, they may lose their enthusiam.
In conclusion, their are both disvantages and advantages of children making choice by themselves. In my view , children need to some decisons indenpently.
- Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food,clothes and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.Other people believe that it is important 61
- Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food,clothes and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.Other people believe that it is important 11
- In a number of countries,some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities.Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.Discuss both thes 56
- Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food,clothes and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes.Other people believe that it is important 11
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1015625 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84497270686 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9098053505 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.461538462 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277356942014 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107970467356 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919939090001 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198667852819 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938284409319 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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