Some people believe that educational qualifications always bring success, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many hold a belief that higher education is the most important predictor of one’s success; while opponents argue that tertiary education cannot guarantee one’s success, there are many other elements combined to build a successful role model. To the best of my knowledge, the former point of view is more reasonable for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is note-worthy that university education is one of the prerequisites to have promising career path in contemporary society. Nowadays, many sociological studies have shown that although it is invisible, the level of qualifications has been accompanied by the increasing number of people’s income. Therefore, it will be a grave mistake to overlook the fact that the solid background of tertiary education plays an instrument in one’s career prospects. For instance, in famous companies like Big Four where graduates with outstanding academic qualifications are sought-after by employers. This example is the illustration of the fact that enrolling in university curriculums is a stepping-stone to develop a bright career path.
Secondly, the counter-argument raised by objectors to this is that there are many factors intertwined to create successful careers, because people will definitely fail unless they have a high effort and determination. This argument could be true to some extent; however, it is incomplete. What they fail to take into account to this is that the fierce competition at working places with other high-qualifications employees has encouraged them to participate in university. For example, Mr. Bill Gates, the founder of software benemoth Microsoft, is a school drop but he succeeded in thriving organizations. However, rare people can do that in real life, which inquiries natural talents and persistence.
According to the above analysis, there is no doubt in my mind that college is the fastest path to success, which is popular with young people today.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Many holds
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25913928651 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4308354998 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.692307692 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159561668393 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460453011249 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373706749445 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911618762622 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393876514866 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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