Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on the society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the meantime, some people are of the belief that entertainers such as actors, athletes and singers are overpaid, whilst others are of the view that they should be paid a lot because celebrities and public figures have a positive effect on the society. I strongly hold the view that entertainers have to be paid much money this is because public figures and celebrities can participate in many activities that could have pivotal consequences on society .In the followings lines, the justifications of my claim will be further discussed.
On one hand, it is a fact that some people hold the view that entertainers should not be overpaid. this is because they believe that there are crucial aspects in the society that deserve more money to be invested in, rather than entertainments. A Prime example of this, investing money in health and education field. For instance, constructing new schools and hospitals to sort out the crisis of over population that is considered a crucial challenge to myriads societies. Secondly, according to a piece of an article that has been published in Al-Ahram weekly newspaper highlighted that, as long as societies are going to pay much money for entertainments and celebrations only, this will have negative results and consequences on the society, since there will not be any investments to be pumped in education and health fields. Hence, it can be said that spending on education and health is crucial.
Nevertheless, despite the idea mentioned above, others argue that celebrities and public figures such as actors, athletes and singers are deserved to gain a lot of money this is because, not only they are help in spreading happiness, positive energies and hopes among individuals of the society, but also they are considered to be the highest class level in any society due to their always representations for their communities in international celebrations and ceremonies around the world. this exemplified by, the attendance of some of them in Oscar celebrations in USA and can festivals in France. In addition to this, actors and singers should wear the latest fashion clothes, drive professional vehicles and live in luxury houses in order to create and develop innovative ideas to entertain folks and individuals. Furthermore, celebrities nowadays have become role model for myriads adolescents around the world, as a result public figures and celebrities should reflect a good image and style to all communities around the world. Thus, entertainers are crucial and pivotal nowadays in societies for spreading the feeling of happiness.
In conclusion, after I have explained both views along with my perspective, it can be reiterated that celebrities that do entertainments in our society are pivotal; not only should they be rewarded, but also they have to be highly paid, since their existences are essential for mankind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1615.20841683 151% => OK
No of words: 464.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24353448276 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01412939885 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.16866005 49.4020404114 237% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.785714286 106.682146367 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1428571429 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4285714286 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222170782213 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817815527586 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07515751474 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15095050907 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307793223018 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.0946893788 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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