some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory or shortage of money. some people believe that it is better to try and improve such a situation
discuss both these views and give your opinion?
it is true that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory or shortage of money. While a number of people believe that it is better to try and improve such a situation. I would agree with the second view.
On the other hand, some people choose to accept fate because they believe that everything will be fine after a bad situation. Firstly, they do not feel pressure about life and material. they think that if God set up their such life, they will not change destiny so they accept. Their fate is not able to become a wealthy person, they don’t have the opportunity to earn a lot of money. however, accepting a bad situation that makes their families must face to drawback not only finance problem but social issues. For instance, my friend does not satify her job in the current company because her manager gives her a lot of work with shorten deadline but her income is lower than other people who are the same position. however, she accepts that because she worries that she is not able to get a new job. And with such a salary, she is enough for her living cost without saving money in the bank. Furthermore, not only a physical problem cause of a lot of work buts also affect her mental.
Others are of the opinion that it is better to try and improve such situations. There is a quite possible reason for acting that way is because they think the ability to change their life and win fate. For instance, a child born in a poor family which is difficult to earn enough money for school fee and living cost. but that child makes much of an effort every day to attend university and get a good job. Afterwards, a child’s family is better than the past and they do not worry about later life and metal is also relax.
In conculsion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better for the second view. I am convinced that that all people would like better lives with no financial problem and their physical and metal are completely comfortable and relax
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, so, while, for instance, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48378378378 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35017211809 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502702702703 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8388454509 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3157894737 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29335938491 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100445920133 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129128196536 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228694958559 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.17389311241 0.056905535591 306% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.