Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situatuion, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.Discuss and give your opinion

When coming up against hardships, people suggest eclectic approaches. Indeed, while a portion chooses to give up to harsh circumstances, the others decide to struggle and believe in a possible outcome of succeeding. Personally judging, determination to face with any kind of situations is a necessary quality to help people reach their dreams.

Relating to the choice of regularly succumbing to difficult cases, people tend to follow safely secured methods to handle issues in order to optimize their benefits. In detail, almost all complicated problems require reasonable creativity and diligence to solve, while to some of which there exists no appropriate answers to begin with. Job dissatisfaction serves as a perfect example owing to the dilemma of continuing at the same position and quitting with the stake of unemployment or getting a worse occupation. As a result, exertions on unsettling situations risk a chance of losing more than gaining, leading to a mindset of fearing to waste resources to no avail.

Despite the ominous probability, betterment is worth striving to acquire as the ultimate purpose of living is mental happiness, which greatly originates from the strenuous accomplishments. In particular, there invariably are hardships awaiting each individual with a fair number of relatively unsolvable ones. Working arduously to pass through the plethora of obstacles creates self-esteem and experience to enhance the likelihood to unravel incoming entwined subjects. Furthermore, both failure and success contribute significantly to each person’s culmination, which, in one way or another, advance numerous societal aspects.

In conclusion, both advocacy groups demonstrate certain levels of philosophy; yet, my stand would definitely be of the latter point. Even though acceptance of fate might be sometimes worth, the odds are that self-achievements never come if one does not give it a try.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, while, in conclusion, in particular, kind of, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 5.0 24.0651302605 21% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6323024055 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22825119703 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.707903780069 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.7671436358 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.076923077 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0746132631976 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0222978250523 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0235232352458 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0411413788335 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254451240547 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.02 8.58950901804 128% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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