museums play a pivotal role in preserving culture and civilization. However, some people have a opinion that museums should represent only home country culture and civilization, while some other people oppose this idea and says museums must reflect cultures and civilizations of all countries around the globe. I too agree with the latter point of view because of some significant reasons.
To begin with,the people who support the former comment put forward some sensible arguments to clarify their stand. First of all, the young generation can learn about the ancestors and other achievement of their country through this museums. For example, the red fort in Delhi and other monuments are preserved as museums by the government of India. This enables the younger generation in India to acquire knowledge about their ancestors as well as the culture and civilization which their forefathers followed. Another point is, it enhances the patriotism in youngsters and they will inspire to contribute to their mother land.
On the other hand ,I strongly believe all museums around the globe should represent all cultures of world. Firstly, by doing this children can learn about the different cultures of world from these museums. Children studies about the different aspects about the world from books and pictures, but seeing directly will improve their understanding about the world. Secondly, this trend will attract the tourists. Tourists mainly visits museums in the country they visit. If a museums consist information about all culture about the world, they can gather more knowledge from this.
To conclude, i strongly believe museums should represent all cultures around the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, as well as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1431.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57947094291 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550943396226 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8299998814 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381884423794 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130695434367 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114840320421 0.0667982634062 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27088845671 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995747294215 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.