Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by a fair number of people that considering one verdict of imprisoning for all criminals is ineffective.Many individuals claim that petty criminals should not be sent to the jail. I am a strong advocate of this attitude and think that the person who commits minor offences should be forced to do unsalaried work in the local communities. Analyzing the deterrent nature of this punishment and its benefit for the society will show this.

To begin with, what impedes criminals from recommitting a crime is the tough tasks of community services. For instance, consider a person who did pick-pocketing. If he is obliged to do difficult tasks like cleaning high-rise buildings, he will not repeat his offence in the future. Thus, as these public jobs are physically demanding, they can impede felons from re-offending.

Secondly, municipals' budgets can be saved as hard labors will be accomplished without spending a penny. As a matter of fact, the mayor should hire workers to perform the municipality labors in order to beautify the city. By forcing minor criminals do harsh works without receiving any payment, the mayor can save a great deal of money to be spent in other sectors. Therefore, what is crucial in this form of punishment is the benefit these offenders brings about for the society.

However, the proponents of the old trend of imprisoning all the criminals believe that prisons are considered to be a perfect chastisement for all offenders. Actually, the loneliness they felt in jails can redress their behavior. Furthermore, societies can be a safer place for families as they are not any felons wandering freely in the vicinity.

As mentioned aforesaid, the voluntary work of criminals in the community services not only deter criminals but also is beneficial for the society. I agree with this opinion because its merits outweighs its drawbacks. In conclusion, I hope that more suppressive laws will be passed to hinder more criminals from perpetrating further offences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Many
...soning for all criminals is ineffective.Many individuals claim that petty criminals ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17125382263 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98110086661 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577981651376 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5033973554 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4705882353 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05882352941 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238191285671 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681557295898 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678664060892 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129076053711 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607070705568 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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