Some people believe that in order to reduce crimes, prisoners should be given longer prison sentences while some people think there are other alternative ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Committing a crime is a main subject of discussion among the public. The ways to treat offenders lead to an argument. Some people claim that add the time of serving a prison term is a sufficient method to prevent crime. While it is believed by other supporters that there exists better treatments to criminals. In my opinion, leaving offenders in the prison with a long time is not a good solution to deter crimes.
Admittedly, it is plausible that prison is a good deterrent to criminals. The limitation of freedom leads to the fear of breaking laws among people. In this situation, giving longer prison sentences could decrease the crime rate. Moreover, the crime record prevent people to find a decent job, especially for those who spend a long time in prison. They may become outdated when released. For example, it is difficult for criminals who had been in a prison for nearly twenty years to use computer in modern society. Thus, finding a good job after spending a much longer time in prison is almost impossible nowadays. So citizens who realize this drawback could restrict themselves, and prevent breaking laws.
Although the above statement is acceptable, I still believe that many better solutions could be applied to reduce crimes. The main aim for putting criminals in prison is to give a rehabilitation to them. Compared with just locking them for a long time, requiring offenders to repay their community is a better educational way. For instance, criminals could involve with educations of vocational trainings, and then use personal skills to improve the life quality of citizens who live in their communities. They could clean the street or work as a volunteer to talk with school groups. In this situation, offenders will not re-offend after receiving fully training and rehabilitation. Thus, there will be a decrease in crime rate for a long-lasting time.
In conclusion, the addition of prison sentences is an acceptable method to deter crime. However, I think there still have other more sufficient ways to decrease the crime rate, such as sending criminals to work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s a sufficient method to prevent crime. While it is believed by other supporters that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04022988506 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78439824077 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537356321839 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4740395648 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.7272727273 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8181818182 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.9879759519 426% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200458385061 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585644227588 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565880014356 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12867720587 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556384783071 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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