Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future career and therefore others subjects such as music and sports are not important. Agree or disagree?
It is an argument that students should be solely taught academic subjects which directly affect to their future career, the other extra-curricular subjects such as sport and music should be eliminated from the school syllabus. I strongly disagree with this point of view.
On the one hand, not only the academic knowledge but also the physical and mental lessons play an integral role in the holistic development of youngsters. Playing sport allows offspring to build up a good health to ensure for efficient studying and to release their stress which stems from parental and peers. In fact, there are many serious diseases have been reported to be linked with the educational strain and physical inactive among young generation. Additionally, artist subjects such as music and art act as elements to stimulate the youths’ creativity which is necessary for their current student life and even their future path.
On the other hand, although no one can deny that academic subjects are crucial for a professional work in the future, they are not enough for the success. In the modernized and globalized society, young people are required to have set skills out of the academic performance in order to attain an advantageous position in the job-labour market. Therefore, the parent should not expect their children to succeed without the presence of other soft skills which are attained from the non-academic articles. Furthermore, it is worth to mention that there are many sport players, singers or composers who succeed not only because of talented but also professional training.
In conclusion, while other subjects are essential to obtain knowledge, non-academic lessons are vital for the children’s physical and intellectual development, and thus not should be deleted from the school program.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 222, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld be deleted from the school program.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33916083916 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87702752818 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573426573427 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.816738794 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.818181818 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301710859192 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10182177882 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975028641153 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195221360762 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087320052771 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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