Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue of young people's education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that secondary school students should not be obliged to undertake unpaid community service, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, there are a number of advantages that can be derived from obligatory volunteering for teenagers. Perhaps the principal benefit is that teenage boys and girls can develop skills that will be invaluable in their studies and future career, meaning that they can gain responsibility as well as social skills. To be more specific, not only can pupils strengthen social bonds, but they are also able to feel a sense of belonging to our society. Furthermore, adolescents who have experience of voluntary activities will be more likely to find well-paying and prestigious employment opportunities with greater ease considering that the majority of large firms have a tendency to hire employees who have the ability to empathise with others.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that mandatory volunteering merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that there is a high possibility that youngsters experience high levels of stress considering that devotion to voluntary work deprives them of a chance to participate in leisure activities that help them let off steam. In addition, being forced for the youth to partake in voluntary activities exerts a negative influence on their academic performance. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for compulsory volunteering, young people could spend huge amounts of time and energy revising for the exam. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32840236686 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95729113943 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1253355379 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.066666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165129935952 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507696190485 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524132223502 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907551466853 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597221618994 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32840236686 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95729113943 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1253355379 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.066666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165129935952 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507696190485 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524132223502 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907551466853 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597221618994 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.