There has been a remarkable increase in the number of people who believe that gender equality should be provided concerning job choice, while another section of society thinks that women are not suitable some kind of jobs, such as being a police or working in national army.
Admittedly, after decades of speculation, authorities now have fairly accurate information concerning benefits of woman police officers or women security personals. Perhaps the main advantage of these is that they can easily cope with complex issues thanks to their good communication skills. According to a report published by the New York Times, the NYPD hired more woman police officers in order to reduce crime rates in New York streets because law-breakers cannot do against behaviors when they encountered these officers. Secondly, women ought to play an equeal role in national army because they have more problem-solving skills than men about strategic wars. Thus, gender equality must be provided by authorities concerning not only police force but also military force.
Despite these arguments there are a variety of possible reasons why these jobs might be perilous for both women and their colleagues. The primary disadvantage of hiring a woman in police force is that they might be perilous for hard operations owing to their changeable emotional moods. A good illustration of this is that a woman police officer did not catch up a child law-breaker deliberately because of her personal feelings. Furthermore, a woman who work as a soldier cannot cope with hard conditions, such as cold, high temperature due to her physical unabilities. Hence, neither police force nor military for suitable for women, therefore, the government should be prudent concerning this decision.
In conclusion, it must be said that the decision as to whether women should play an equal role as men in both police and military force must be taken in the context of the entire society. However, my personal view is that even though this kind of jobs look like suitable for women, its drawbacks should not be underestimated by the government.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...sion, it must be said that the decision as to whether women should play an equal role as men ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21114369501 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80454955969 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568914956012 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.2020642641 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.692307692 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343859686695 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117228533741 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0883874823073 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224103672772 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613098813316 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.