Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while other people argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about animal protection and animal rights. However, whether we should utilize animals for human purposes has recently caused a heated debate. In my view, it is acceptable to reasonably use animals for the benefit of mankind and impossible to completely cut down the human's reliance on animals.

It is clear that human beings are standing at the top of the food chain of this planet. As big fish eat smaller ones, mankind uses animals for its own benefit, which is consistent with natural law. So, it is hard to say that we are doing wrong by exploiting animals for our interests.

Moreover, it is unrealistic to ban using animals since the history of human civilization is entwined with the history of the ways we have learned to manipulate animal resources.
We have raised cattle for food, the outcomes of animal experiments have saved many lives, and people have even kept pets to satisfy their psychological needs. If using animals were prohibited, we would firstly close thousands of KFC and McDonald's franchises around the world, because they are slaughtering lovely chicken to make money! Moreover, everyone in this world would become a vegetarian.

This is not to say that it is always right for people to use animals for any purpose whatsoever. Some people hunt wild animals just for fun; others kill rare animals for their expensive furs. Indeed, these behaviors are not only cruel and unnecessary but actually against long-term interests of human race. Humans should shoulder their responsibilities of maintaining the diversity of wild animals and the balance of ecosystem.

In summary, using animals rationally for the benefit of humans is justified. Meanwhile, some behaviors that are harmful to both animals and humans have to be prohibited. By doing so, we can ensure that our next generation will also benefit from animal resources.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, while, in summary, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14423076923 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72139167213 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2275980837 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3125 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31125065629 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116062352325 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676265139484 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17083763145 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673301531124 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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