Some people feel that popular icons such as sports or movie stars play the important part in shaping the character of young people because they may act as role models. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
It is undeniable that famous people such as singers or football players play the main role in shaping of teenagers’ personality. It is an undeniable that a well-known person might have a great influence on society. Personally, I completely support this idea for some main reasons as follows.
As far as the first idea is concerned, thanks to the development of technologies, the youth generation have chances to interact with many famous people in different fields such as art, sport via the internet by electronic gadgets such as smartphones, laptops... They have been introduced to celebrities since early. Besides, curiosity and desire to become famous are always presented in the minds of young generations. These lead to the fact that they always learn and imitate all the behaviors of these people who are their idols.
As far as the second part is concerned, youth is often dominated by social crowd effect. Besides, they frequently compare themselves with their surrounding friends about the social trend including some idols in different fields such as singers, soccer, and dancers . By way of illustration, to become well-known people like Beckham who is one of their idols, my children always play football under serious discipline despite the fact that they joke together in small teams at home. They learned their both negative and positive personalities. Some time I should help them to analyze and filter for studying.
In conclusion, it is my belief that famous people influence the young generation’s characters nowadays.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, second, so, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1300.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26315789474 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89959450321 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595141700405 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7676728135 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210254700034 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665406654651 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470484062937 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127892823925 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00637547088773 0.056905535591 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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