Some people give more importance to artists painter writers musicians in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science What do you think Do people prefer arts to technology in your view

Nowadays, in the modern era some people working in the field of arts are considered having large impacts on many others. In this essay, I will state my opinion and present some reasons whether people prefer arts to technology or not.
In my opinion, people give more importance to artists because of some following advantages it brings. First, arts give human being opportunity to see things from different perspective. It’s clear that in th world of arts we can use imagination and creativity to see things as the way we want not simply as the way they are. For example, in the world of science a cat is just an animal with soft fur and 4 legs but to the writer’s eyes, it is considered a friend, a hero or even a cultural symbol. In addition, arts instill religious spiritual value to each individual, arts as a source of inspiration evoke happiness and promote creative spirit through many different ways such as music, pictures, movies,.. arouses a awareness of sympathy. Arts help gain deeper in sight into the world we live in and become well-rounded person.
However, in my thought, people prioritize technology and science rather than arts due to its benefits and requirements in the modern life. Technology and science support people to achieve material success and make money, they and their family can lead a better life. In the contrary, people who follow the path of art cannot get high salaried jobs moreover it takes them a lot of time. As can be seen many artists struggle to pay their bills and go for other metal jobs which is most people aim to achieve in their life. In addition, technology and science creates a cultural of instant gratification, many forms of arts and modern platforms such as 3D art, digital arts,.. are designed by high-tech devices, which attract more and more people. As a result, they are more interested in quick entertainment and distractions rather than arts.
In conclusion, each field has its own merits. However, the benefits of technology and science overweight those of arts. That the reason why people give preference to technology over arts.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8635097493 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67764388424 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562674094708 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0852405139 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8947368421 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284518224143 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883412435936 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708727471749 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18194375103 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303822856622 0.056905535591 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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