Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others,however, say that thus would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss them.
Health is one of the important things into our life. People consider that with adding sport facilities can make our body become healthier. While other says that it only has a little effect. The both of two opinions will be discussed.
Firstly, rising up the total number of sport facilities can give some effect toward people who want to be health such as health on relationship, means people sometimes go to sport with their friends, from it can make people have a good sharing to each other. For example, people who like playing basketball, volleyball, football. So, it can be make their body health and also make health relationship also. Therefore, increasing public sport can make the level of health people is up as well.
Secondly, a way to improve public health is not only from sport facilities but also from ourselves motivation, means that health is come from inside heart, when we are on bad thinking, it will be effect on our heart and many illness will come to our body. For example, when someone hurt you and you think it too much, it can make disease come to you. So, to support it, we should keep our bad mouth to other and try to control ourselves from bad things from other. The other way is with keep your dietary habit such as do not eat much food that contain much fat, cholesterol, carbohydrate like junk food, fried food, etc.
To sum up, many methods to escalate public health but for reminding our mind, there is quote about health, health is not everything but we have to know that everything without health is nothing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ies can make our body become healthier. While other says that it only has a little ef...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ealth and also make health relationship also. Therefore, increasing public sport can...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun illness seems to be countable; consider using: 'many illnesses'.
Suggestion: many illnesses
...ing, it will be effect on our heart and many illness will come to our body. For example, whe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66545454545 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35961616153 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523636363636 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.8118844312 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6923076923 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281057918511 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103031559367 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859850785582 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177513193553 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482124915641 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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