Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some of the people believe the best solution to develop public health is rising the number of sport possibilities, otherwise, other people think that other measures are needed. I agree that increasing sports facilities is the best approach to reach public health.
Most of the people need a good motivation for exercise. Governments can with providing more sports facilities in cities make this motivation easily. Today, people are more social than past, if they see other people or their friends that use urban sports facilities, they persuade to try them. After a while, it makes a habit for people to training.
In the following, some types of sports equipment are very expensive and many people can not buy them but with shared equipment, which will exist in cities, they can exercise many expensive sports. The cheap shared sports instruments can be a good reason for training for young people because young people usually do not have enough money to buy sports facilities.
Although, There are many other ways that can improve public health too. for example, healthy foods and healthy lifestyles are very important to have public health. They can increase with some advertisement programs too.
To sum up, a huge number of sports equipment in cities can be a cause of growing up public health. Furthermore, some advertisements about healthy foods and healthy lifestyles can be also helpful.
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- Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo 84
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Suggestion: Some
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Message: Did you mean 'trying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'persuade' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: trying
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ough money to buy sports facilities. Although, There are many other ways that can imp...
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Suggestion: For
...ays that can improve public health too. for example, healthy foods and healthy life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 229.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15283842795 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60619314535 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550218340611 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 359.1 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3943732561 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7692307692 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6153846154 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286167153284 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11668224208 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904858154996 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1811525003 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1056755155 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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