Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

As globally accepted, music distinguishes different cultures by its extensive capacity. Nevertheless, some people believe that music could obliterate the cultural and generation gap among the community and integrate its audiences. From my perspective, music is a great mean for cultural union due to its conveyed meanings but not appropriate for minimizing the generation gap.

On the first hand, music composers convey meaningful messages which are widely supported and accompanied by people of diverse nationalities. Therefore, it could play a crucial role in combining multiple cultures. These songs usually transmit global issues, social phenomenons or simply singers' perspectives on different queries. For instance, with the album "Love yourself", BTS - a male Korean band - conveys messages of love and sympathy which is widely popular in America, Europe, and Asia. Through numerous global music tours, they have reached thousands of people who are motivated by their songs and attracted by Kpop, or Asian, culture.

On the other hand, music is not an appropriate tool to deal with the generation gap because music taste varies enormously between ages. While young people, age 16 - 30, tend to listen to pop music and other music types with the vigorous beat and catchy rhythm, the old ones are keen on gentle music which could help them relaxed and releases stress after a long working day. Due to different musical tastes, people still cannot understand each other generation to sympathy and unite.

In conclusion, music can play a vital role in joining various cultures but not an effective one in dealing with the generation gap. If singers could diversify their music style, I believe that their music would have the potential to affect multiple ages.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (4 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40647482014 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77821320476 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618705035971 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5870697915 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.615384615 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202742727923 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788951065742 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534196021994 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125834438027 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374638901311 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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