Some people say that music plays an important role in society while others believe that it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals Discuss both views and give your opinion

On the one hand, there are some people who perceive music primarily as a form of entertainment. They argue that its primary function is to offer enjoyment, relaxation and an escape from the pressures of everyday life. People attend concerts, listen to their favorite artists, or engage with various music genres as a way to unwind and find pleasure in their leisure time. This can be used as a assistance to raise the rate of happiness and reducing anxiety levels across nations.
On the other hand, many individuals believe that music holds a significant role in society beyond mere entertainment. The first , music has been an integral part of cultural identity and heritage for centuries. Different societies have developed their musical traditions, reflecting their history, values and way of life. For example, through music, generations can connect with their roots and preseve their cultural legacy, strengthening a sense of belonging and pride in one’s heritage. Additionally , education and learning music has been widely recognized for its positive impact on children's cognitive development. Numerous studies have shown that engaging in musical activities from an early age can lead to significant improvements in various cognitive abilities, memory, and language skills.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, then, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1085.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 198.0 315.596192385 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4797979798 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91252038619 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.671717171717 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 506.74238477 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5910825259 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.5 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187657877758 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766257597356 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061104408419 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139182475992 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351994407876 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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