Some people say that outdoor activities bring benefits to children’s development rather than computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, it is believed by most people that engaging in outdoor activities is positive to children's mental and physical development rather than join in indoor activities like video games. From my perspective, I strongly agree with this point of view and this essay will point out some outdoor activities benefits and drawbacks of screen games.
On one hand, there are numerous benefits that come from outdoor activities. To start with physical health impact, children can improve their health through joining in such activities. This is because children are supplied sufficient vitamin D frequently, which plays a significant role in their bone development. For example, playing sport or training their physical health under morning sunlight is better than playing screen activities the whole day. Secondly, children can immerse themselves in a dynamic environment and learn several soft skills. Morefuther, children’s problem-solving skills are also being consolidated by participating in outdoor activities. Consequently, just by joining in this kind of activities, both physical and mental health can considerably grow and become better day by day.
On the other hand, health issues and social negative behavior result from video game’s drawbacks. By accessing the internet frequently, the youth generation these days are being destroyed by massive blue light coming from modern technological devices such as computers or smartphones. All of these are major factors which harmful to their eye causing a high risk of myopia. In addition, sitting in one position for more than two hours leads to several health problems like headaches, back hurt, it also impacts their bone flexibility for a long period of time. Moreover, lots of games may contain violet and pornographic features which not appropriate for children under 18 ages. As a result, children tend to have a rampage and unrespected behavior by imitating what they see in their games.
In conclusion, I believe that outdoor activities gain various merits on the children growing progress. And it is suggested that they should stay far away from playing video games to avoid health matters and anti-social behaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44705882353 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86833928297 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594117647059 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3769054206 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.941176471 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.70588235294 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201863146623 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624591692278 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578527306645 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132281404584 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739885874137 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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