Some people think that playing computer games and watching reality shows can help children develop cognitive skills, while others argue that playing video games and watching television shows does not help them improve their cognitive skills. In my view, playing video games has positive impacts on children’s minds.
To begin with, there are various advantages to playing video games. Firstly, playing video games require using logical thinking; therefore, it help children to develop problem-solving skills. As a consequence, they may improve their academic skills. Secondly, playing games or watching television shows works as a stress reliever as well as giving them a feeling of pleasure. As a result, they are less likely to suffer from mental health issues such as anxiety, panic attacks, mental disorders, and so on. In the U.K., for example, the majority of students play video games to avoid mental illness.
Furthermore, it is a fact that in this cutting-edge era, people will be able to earn money by using their gaming skills.Due to eSports, people can play different types of games and represent their nation as well as being famous. To exemplify, the famous esports player Ninja won world forth-night championship, and hence he gained many trophies, money, and 10 million plus Instagram followers.In addition to this, playing battleground games involved players toLay the game out in teams. Thus, playing games teaches the value of teamwork.
To sum up, playing video games or watching web shows not only assists children in improving vital skills of logical thinking, but it also saves them from psychological disorders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35907335907 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6723725621 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621621621622 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.854702659 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.0 7.06120827912 241% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327597720317 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130602907771 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828733091389 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208651873996 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817568335021 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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