Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviour. Others believe that amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviour most. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Children is supposed to affected by the content of TV programs. While the others claim that it is the length of time they spend on watching TV make a serious impact on their action. Although the amount of time also partly make decision to the way children behave, I believe that youngsters nowadays apparently got changed by the content of programs.
On the one hand, watching TV for long period of time will bring about many deleterious consequences. First of all, children who continuously watch TV during a day have tendency to stay away from curriculum activities which sometimes associated with physical health problems. In addition, if children become over-reliant to electric means of media, they undeniably neglect engagement their surrounding relationship which results in gradual communication capability loss. Hence, they will find hard to live in a harmony social with other children compared to their peers.
On the other hand, not all of programs producer’s target is to educate these young viewers because of increasing bad images’s appearance frequency. Youtube, for example, have recently being covered with a range of uneducational children videos which consists unhealthy habits and improper behavior such as violent game tutorial or even sex cartoon while children consider it as their first priority in terms of entertainment. Moreover, in our consumer society which commercial also play an crucial role have been a silent factor leading to raise their strong desire to unknown-origin toys or useless video games. Once this happened, a buy-at-all-cost attitude will ruin their personality development which hinder their fall-in-line with real social life in near future.
In conclusion, either content or the length of time have their own implication though I agree that the element that has more considerable impact on children is content. Therefore, it is an imperative need for parents to shape their children’s personalities through controlling their TV viewing habits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...affected by the content of TV programs. While the others claim that it is the length ...
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Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... On the one hand, watching TV for long period of time will bring about many deleterious conse...
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Line 4, column 498, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...umer society which commercial also play an crucial role have been a silent factor ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48553054662 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06157282309 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64308681672 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4161579834 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.230769231 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4615384615 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21742688142 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825428310526 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497991949427 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143156177024 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321448016888 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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