Some people think that in the countries with high rate of unemployment, there is no need for the government to offer secondary education to primary school pupils who have no hope of finding a job in the future

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Some people think that in the countries with high rate of unemployment, there is no need for the government to offer secondary education to primary school pupils who have no hope of finding a job in the future

With increasing unemployment rates, some people believe that governments should not offer secondary education to primary school students who have no hope of finding a job in the future. I completely disagree with this belief because offering secondary school education is crucial for making young minds a part of the economy’s skilled labor.

On the one hand, secondary education builds several soft skills that are not introduced in primary education, making every student ready for his future life and career. For example, all high school students need to work on group assignments as well as presentations for which they need to work alongside others, coordinate ideas and manage the team, giving them insights to team spirit, communication and collaboration. With these skills, young students who might have been thought to be unemployable in primary school have better chances of getting employed as they are deemed as skilled workforce of the economy.

Alternatively, some students may be disabled and may be thought as being unemployable, and secondary education gives them the opportunity to explore technical subjects and aspects that may in fact allow them have successful future careers. Recent research has shown that for many autistic students, secondary education plays a vital role in introducing them to new concepts, developing their cognitive skills and building their imagination. For instance, Bill Gates, one of the most celebrated personalities, was on the autistic spectrum and was thought to face difficulties in the future fob market, but staying in school helped him explore science, mathematics and computers and finally become a globally acclaimed success.

In conclusion, I wholly disagree with the view that there is now requirement for the government to provide secondary education to primary school students who do not have good prospects of finding a job in the future as secondary education is pivotal for transforming all students into skilled workers and exposing them to distinct subjects giving them more employment opportunities.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.546875 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97686227165 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2142053313 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 197.222222222 106.682146367 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5555555556 20.7667163134 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37007768601 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16219454674 0.084324248473 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131707396925 0.0667982634062 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250633756849 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120249053723 0.056905535591 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.0946893788 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.49 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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