Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people Do you agree or disagree

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Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people.
Do you agree or disagree?

Helping the disadvantaged people such as the out of work people and the displaced people is one of the government’s responsibility. I agree with this because with helping them it can keep them alive with better welfare and we could save their future’s generation for our country.
First, keeping their life is one of the government’s aims of helping them. Plenty of aid can be given to the jobless and homeless which will escalate their life’s hope. By giving aim, they’ll have more effort for repairing their life’s prosperity. For example, the unemployed who given a job by the government will use their time wisely because they want to change their life’s quality.

In addition, saving the children’s future is also one of the profits from helping the disadvantages of people. As we know, children are the successor for the next generation in the future, they cannot stay alive if they are living under the poverty, such as in the boulevard side or live remotely in uncertain places. It can disturb them and the will feeling hopeless for their future. So, helping them is one way to save the children’s future for our descendants.
In conclusion, taking care of the homeless and the out of work people are the responsibilities of the government which can be done by giving aid for the unemployed and giving flat for the homeless. Besides that, they are the citizens of its government we also have to save their life’s hope and saving the children’s next generation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 296, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a given'.
Suggestion: who is a given
...prosperity. For example, the unemployed who given a job by the government will use their ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1279.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0753968254 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15893703957 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492063492063 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.545235101 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.583333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148384838292 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671546472965 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957071389935 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111788619181 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699259110729 0.056905535591 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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