Extreme sports have raised a question of whether they should be prohibited or not. While a larger number of people are of the idea of imposing a ban on such sport, it seems to me that providing citizens with freedom to opt for sport is more beneficial.
On the one hand, people against dangerous sports justify that they should be banned due to the negative impacts they exert on the economy and health. Firstly, such expenses on organizing and partaking in extreme sports are exorbitant, yet rarely do they reflect the Olympic ideal nor have been approved to be played at major sports events. Thus, eliminating games which are not beneficial, and even detrimental to the economy, could be deemed as a reasonable policy. Moreover, such sports as bungee jumping or kayaking require a high level of strength, making players exert themselves and, therefore, having a high probability of injury. Hence, given an official ban on them, it would be an effective solution to preventing citizens from venturing their physical health on risky pastime.
On the other hand, I believe that extreme sports should be treated equally as other sports. Indeed, people playing dangerous sports are required to have a sufficient amount of knowledge of the sports as well as precaution such as equipping themselves with essential sport gears. Such measures, which prevent players from life-threatening conditions, make the policy of banning extreme sports on safety grounds unconvincing. Additionally, it is reasoned that in case of injuries, the players themselves, not the authority, are held accountable for their recovery. Therefore, if extreme sports are outlawed, it could be seen as a personal freedom infringement, rather than a strategy to protect citizens’ health.
Briefly, I concur with the view that people should be free to participate in dangerous sports, provided that they abide by the safety rules.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...e that extreme sports should be treated equally as other sports. Indeed, people playing da...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed that they abide by the safety rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24836601307 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86940014939 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571895424837 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6594194335 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.538461538 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233788067381 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913234328135 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682553973925 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172381469041 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291106617474 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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