Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Although some people argue that children will be greatly benefitted if they do the paid work, others consider that doing paid work can be detrimental to children. In my opinion, I believe that paid work can bring about more problems for children compared to any advantage it might bring.
Irrefutably, there are some inherent benefits of children working to earn money. Firstly, children can forge an understanding of the value of money. This teaches them that money does not grow on the trees and helps them appreciate the hard work needed to earn it. Secondly, they take the first steps in learning not to be frivolous with money. Many older children, for instance, have a part-time job in order to save for something they would otherwise be unable to afford. Understanding money management, furthermore, is valuable and practical when, as adults, they will need to balance their finances.
Nevertheless, in spite of the advantages above, I believe children could face serious drawbacks from paid work. One dangerous-hidden problem is that it exposes them to exploitation through slave labour. In many third countries that do not enforce children's employment laws, they will likely end up working under extreme conditions or even in life-threatening situations for negligible wages. Setting off life in this way makes it almost unfeasible for them to escape the poverty cycle when reaching maturity. Another obvious issue is that working may affect a child’s presence in the classroom and their ability to pay attention to schoolwork. This can be a problem as only a solid educational background will stand them in good stead for the future.
In conclusion, being exploited or struggling with attending class and academic grades far outweigh any of the minor merits that could result from children being involved in work experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20875420875 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85384472365 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62962962963 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4597737663 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.133333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324571886363 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105104987526 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956392366758 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210791762191 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110922534582 0.056905535591 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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