Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of the same company or organization. To what extend do you agree?

Many retail stores have found the power of the Internet as a great channel to sell their products worldwide. As a reason of this many bricket's stores might be closed. I, however, believe outlet stores have a future and will not be destroyed by their online competitors.

Firstly, online shopping follows with necessity of delivery to the customer. While I concede that online retailers can offer products cheaper , the problem is a hidden cost of delivery and its return in case we do not like it or it does not suit our needs. As a result of this, adding shipping costs and possible returning cost for shipping might levelled the price of product. A good illustration of this is international shopping, high cost of postage from foreign country often making total amount of purchased goods higher than bought at the store.

Convenience is another problem. Many advocates of online shopping oppose that buying products from comfort of our home or office is a main benefit. However, I would argue that retail store gives opportunity to shoppers instant access to the product without waiting for its delivery. In fact, most of delivery partners can not handle rapidly increasing number of commercial parcels. Hence, most of the parcels are delayed and customer has to wait for purchased product even longer.

The main reason why online shopping can not lead to end of high-street stores is in-store experience. Online shopping is offering wide range of products, however, decision to buy mostly depending only on pictures. In contrast, people shopping in stores have the unique experience to put their hands on the product. Take shoes for example, almost each retailer despite a standards of shoes' size produce shoes in different shape. Therefore, many people have to try shoes before they purchase it.

In short, not only high-street shops at the end selling products cheaper than their online competitors, but they also give instant access to purchased goods. Therefore I acknowledge that online stores offer wide range of products, I believe that in-store experience is the main reason why retail stores remain alive.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...annel to sell their products worldwide. As a reason of this many brickets stores m...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ine retailers can offer products cheaper , the problem is a hidden cost of deliver...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... The main reason why online shopping can not lead to end of high-street store...
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Line 7, column 370, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a standard' or simply 'standards'?
Suggestion: a standard; standards
...r example, almost each retailer despite a standards of shoes size produce shoes in differen...
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Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...give instant access to purchased goods. Therefore I acknowledge that online stores offer ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in contrast, in fact, in short, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12068965517 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58590868993 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5740819495 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7894736842 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3157894737 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0665427200996 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234356235069 0.084324248473 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0230749041925 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0398028073867 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202446753707 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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